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Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


Delicate, the balance
of mind and soul.
Surreptitiously it creeps
between the threads
of sanity-
writhing on the border;
falling, and hanging on
like butterfly wings
caught in a tornado.
©2006-2008 ~pamelaski
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Submitted: Mar 15, 2006
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Written last Saturday, the first day of my recent hospital stay. Yes, I'm doing a bit better now and I'm out of the hospital, thankfully. :)

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~winged-cavalier:iconwinged-cavalier: Mar 28, 2006, 12:38:40 PM
Your voice is especially strong in this piece, and I even wonder if it wouldn't do very well as a slam piece. The sort of dark, swaying meter is wonderfully caught of guard by the sudden use of the tornado as a symbol in the last line....it's like setting silk on fire, if that makes any sense :)

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Remember the simplistic beauty in life, and revel in the spirit of all things around you.
~pamelaski:iconpamelaski: Mar 28, 2006, 1:33:35 PM
Whoa nice, setting silk on fire.... I like it.

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"You might, rabbit, you might."

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